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Betsy Morrell's avatar

What a simple, elegant, poignant arc. And repeating certain sentences, increases the impact and the meaning of the spaces between. Another triumph.

Jamie Holland's avatar

Thank you, Betsy! The constraint of “The time…” really helped filter out unnecessary words and experiences. Thank you for your constant support!!

Ron Wetherington's avatar

Very self-mending. Love the imagery conveyed by hearing what's not said in the repitition.

Jamie Holland's avatar

thank you, Ron!

Rebecca Barry's avatar

This is so good. Thank you.

Sandy Coburn's avatar

Your work is always seemingly straightforward and yet always incredibly dense in meaning, emotion, intensity. Hemingway, I suppose. You're reading these unpretentious lines, but find something building, building over the course of the piece that just crescendos at the end.

Thank you for another window into ourselves.

Jamie Holland's avatar

Awww thank you, Sandy! So nice of you. I hope your writing is going well.

Susan Todd's avatar

I love this! And I send you a huge trophy for surviving this and being the loving generous wise wonderful woman,wife,mother that you are!

Jamie Holland's avatar

You are too kind, Susan. I just received the trophy! thank you! xo

Rebecca Schamess's avatar

Jamie I love the form you’re working in, and I relate so much to watching a formidable parent deteriorate.

Jamie Holland's avatar

Thanks so much, Rebecca!

Brenda's avatar

Beautiful and breathless. ❤️‍🩹

Bill Mc's avatar

Brava Jamie! So interesting to me…how you settled on The time…. starters. It works wonderfully!!

Jamie Holland's avatar

thank you!!! I'm glad it works.